If I'd played the game I'd be willing...

Date: 2009-12-23 08:55 pm (UTC)
But I haven't, so my feedback would lack some understanding of the characters.

On the other hand, if you're aiming for your story to be understood by those who haven't played the game (as I sometimes attempt) you could send it my way. I'd give it a look over.
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