Looking for a Dragon Age Beta.

[prisoner_24601]

So I have this Dragon Age fic that kind of just popped out but it needs another pair of eyes to look at it. It's an Alistair/Anora/Male!Grey Warden (Amell) almost romance, but kind of not. It's probably technically slightly AU. Looking for g/s/p feedback, character feedback (especially with Alistair - who I'm not sure I have in character), and pretty much anything else that might need work.

It's short - about 3000 words. If anyone is willing to take a look, let me know.

Comments

[kosiah.livejournal.com]

Sure!

[prisoner--24601.livejournal.com]

Awesome. I will send it over to you shortly.

If I'd played the game I'd be willing...

[nivenus.livejournal.com]

But I haven't, so my feedback would lack some understanding of the characters.

On the other hand, if you're aiming for your story to be understood by those who haven't played the game (as I sometimes attempt) you could send it my way. I'd give it a look over.

Re: If I'd played the game I'd be willing...

[prisoner--24601.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much for the offer, but it has major gigantic spoilers about the ending and I don't want to ruin the game for you.

Re: If I'd played the game I'd be willing...

[nivenus.livejournal.com]

Be happy to see it when I'm done though ;).

[noneko.livejournal.com]

Oh man, the Alistair fangirls are going to throw a fit.

I'm excited.

[prisoner--24601.livejournal.com]

ahahahah we can only hope!

[xenzen.livejournal.com]

I want to play Dragon Age. :(

[prisoner--24601.livejournal.com]

Why aren't you?

[xenzen.livejournal.com]

No monies. :( Also, I'm not sure my dinky little laptop is capable, since it couldn't run Mass Effect. :/

[prisoner--24601.livejournal.com]

Boo that sucks! I'm not sure that not being able to run ME would stop your laptop from running DA though. ME has much more polished and intricate visuals. DA is graphically like a game from for or five years ago - although I will say that the loading times on some of the areas (the main city in particular) made my computer chug - but then, I'm not running the latest stuff on here either.

[xenzen.livejournal.com]

Oh, really? Hm! That gives me hope, but my funds are tied up with virus subscriptions and domain name renewals next month. :/